New Home

As it is Friday, I am joining in on the Red Writing Hood meme over at the Red Dress Club.  This week’s prompt was, “For Friday’s meme, we’d like to work on dialogue. Craft a piece of short fiction featuring the dialogue between two people arguing. Focus more on the spoken language and less on setting details. Think “Hills Like White Elephants” by Hemingway.”  Ahh, Hemingway. I’m not quite there, but hope you enjoy it anyway.

New Home

Dan surveyed the room.  Bed made, reading glasses and pen on top of the crossword puzzle on the nightstand, family pictures lined up on the low dresser, clothes neatly arranged in the closet, crocheted pillows piled up on the chair in the corner.

“Well, that looks like everything.  I’m going to head out now.  Do you have everything?” he asked.

“No,” came the reply.

“It looks like everything’s in order?  What do you need?”

“My house,” she said.

Dan’s shoulders slumped.  He scratched his temple and smoothed his graying brown hair.

“Look, Mom, we’ve been through this.  You can’t live there anymore.  This is your home now.”

“No.  This is a room.  A home has more than one room and there aren’t a bunch of old people wandering around in it,” she said.

“This is a nice place, Mom.  You’ll make friends.  You can watch Jeopardy with them.  I saw some people playing cards out in the main area.  You like cards.  And, you don’t have to cook anymore.  It’s really going to be nice once you get used to it.”

She crossed her arms and slouched in her chair, squinting her rheumy blue eyes at her son.

“I don’t want to get used to it.  I don’t need any new friends and the food here stinks.  No taste at all.  You’d think they’d never heard of salt,” she said.

“I’m sure you can get some salt if you want,” Dan sighed.

“No I can’t!” she snapped.  “They won’t give me any because of my blood pressure.  If I want salt, I should be able to have salt.  What’s the worst that’ll happen?  I’ll die?  Save you and your lovely wife some trouble.”

“Mom. We’ve been over this.  You can’t live with us.  It just wouldn’t work.”

“No, we haven’t. I wasn’t part of that decision. It makes no sense to spend all this money here when I could live with you for free.  You have plenty of room in that big house of yours.  Maggie never did like me.  Cold hearted.  That’s what you are, cold hearted.  Abandoning me in this, this, place,” she said, waving her gnarled hand around the room.

“That’s enough!  This has nothing to do with Maggie or me being cold hearted and you know it.  You need more than we can provide for you at our home.  This is the best place for you.”

“I am not a child.  I am your mother and you owe me a little respect and consideration.  There is no reason I couldn’t stay with you.  No reason at all.  Except you don’t want me.  You just want to leave me here and forget all about me,” she turned her head away from him.

“Mom, you left a towel on top of the stove.  You almost burned down the house.  Look at your arm.”  He picked up her left arm, bandaged from the elbow to wrist and moved it in front of her face. “You’re burned, Mom. Burned. We can’t have you at our home because it’s not safe, Mom. It’s not safe.”

He set her arm back down and kissed her on the top of her head.

“I have to go now, Mom,” he said.  “I’ll call you tomorrow and see how you’re settling in.  I’ll be back next weekend to visit.  Okay?”

She didn’t look at him.

“Okay.  I’m going then. See you next weekend.  Love you.”

The door clicked closed as he left.  She rubbed her arm, stood up, and grabbed the crossword, pen, and reading glasses.  Then settled back into the chair.


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  1. Cheryl @ Mommypants
    Twitter: mommy_pants
    says:

    I really, really liked the ending. It was like she was just giving him a hard time to do it, when really, she’s fine.

  2. Kristy says:

    I think my husband and his family have had that exact conversation with his grandparents at different times!
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  3. Casey
    Twitter: MaritimeMom
    says:

    Wow, persuasive. Are we seeing some personal insight into your life?

    • Jessica Anne says:

      Thanks. No personal insight, other than imagined. All our parents still live in their own homes and no one I know has set their house on fire yet. :)

  4. Aging Mommy says:

    I too liked the twist at the end. A great choice of dialogue, one that so very many families I know have at some point and never an easy one. I think you did a really good job.

  5. Diana
    Twitter: knzus
    says:

    I have actually heard of this happening to friends when it came time for them to make that difficult choice. I’m going to be totally opposite and WANT to go… so I can finally rest! LOL!

    Excellent story, dear! Love the son’s side of the conversation, trying to make mom understand. A+ :)

    • Jessica Anne says:

      Thanks! I love getting an A+! :) I agree, I would love someone to take care of me and get some rest. Maybe I’ll feel differently if I don’t make the decision.

  6. Oh the guilt! What a tough conversation. I really liked the way you melded the dialogue and description.

  7. Kerri says:

    Such a fitting ending! Good for her for giving her son a hard time. She reminded me of my own Grandmother.

  8. Veronica
    Twitter: mayangelstar
    says:

    Stopping by from the Red Dress Club!

    I really liked the way this dialogue flowed, right up until the very end. Her sadness carried through as well as his love for his mother. An argument that was hard on both of them..

    Good job!

  9. The Drama Mama
    Twitter: poopscoopinmama
    says:

    This was fantastic, it had a great flow to it, and I could definitely picture the conversation and the people having it. I love that she was fine in the end as well.

  10. Nancy C
    Twitter: AwayWeGoNancy
    says:

    This conversation hit home for me as well. If we’re not already having this conversation, we are probably practicing it in his head.

    I think the reveal of the fire was especially well done. Up to that point, I could see both sides, and the bandage hit home that this was no longer something to be debated. It was an issues of safety…but I would love to see how this feisty lady shakes up that place!

  11. Ash
    Twitter: AshatShades
    says:

    Oh how I dread this day that is coming sooner than I want – hit so close to home.

    The salt, such a simple pleasure removed – excellent example. Crossword puzzle at the end – that little dickens.

    Excellent job, per usual though!

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